You have the eyes of the innocent

I can see that your heart is pure

Which means to me that I shall

Follow you all the days of my life

And copy in all that you do

I shall mimic everything about you

I should where my hair like you do

I should wear my clothing as you do

FOR MY MOTHER ONCE TOLD ME

If I want to get to heaven

Then I must be more like you

Does this mean my own mother loves

You more then she loves her own blood

If in fact this is so then I should follow you

All the days of my long long lonely  life 

YES IN FACT I SHOULD WANT TO BE YOU

Now I will sit, think, and plot to be like you

In fact I will put a spy cam on you to know

Just exactly what you are up to when alone

I must be careful that you don't see what I do

There are those who would take it the wrong way

Then in fact one day I will become you 

 Then my mother would love me too 

9, 27,2010,, Mon 6pm

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Wow, striking words.

Hi Qnuan ;} Thank you,,, does that mean you like it ;}  I put it up on a poetry web- site when I first wrote it. One of the ladies said "oh my dear,,I'm sure your mother love's you,, if you want to talk email me.  

I definitely like it Debbie! There is a lot of emotion inside, which gives it a strong artistic flare. The way you approach and describe your feelings and the way the discourse unfolds to the unexpected end allows the reader to almost climb inside of you and feel it with you. If you’ll allow me I will sympathise with your plight; I’m sure it must be terrible to constantly try and live up to something or someone else and feel like you’re always coming up short in pleasing others.  

Hey Qnuan ;} my mother never said that to me, I was watching "single white female", 30 minutes or so ,the movie came out 1992,, though I wrote my poem 2010,,, glad I don't have a friend like that ;}  you take care !

Oh, lol! Wow it's amazing that you can place yourself so empathically in her shoes! :)

Hey RAIBEART" ;} many blessing this fine day,, glad you liked it,, my mom is in heaven,, she never said that to me ;}  I wrote it as I was surfing the channels and came to "Single White Female" remember that movie? No doubt some of us do know people like this ;} The pic.,, is a poster  I've had scene the 80's ;}     

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